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Hey all. this time, i'm really acting like a teenager (not expected, but yeah ) i've seriously tried to write a poem in English.

I beg your forgiveness for i probably crushed your language and nothing will be the same again for English after i did this, perhaps Oxford lecturers will commit a mass suicide, but i still want you to have a look. let me know where are my mistakes (:

http://tinyurl.com/65qqdnu

Note: i tried to imitiate old school ballads of bards.

DSW, this time do not directly say what you want to say, please, this time treat me as sweet Patrick (: (i hope you recovered a bit, at least)

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"God is a comedian, playing to an audience too afraid to laugh."
Voltaire

Tony not ignoring you, too much else happening again. That is one amazing ballad and needs more study- many many congratulations on attempting such a huge poem in "olde style" that is HARD.

You just had to be doom laden again, didn't you? Come on mate, how about some "Happy Ever After??"

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The most wasted of all days is one without laughter.
e e cummings (1894 - 1962)

thanks for your kind words which proves your kind heart, gumtree. i'll be waiting for further comments about it (:

oh, if a poem is not tragic, why should people read it? for ends like "Happy Ever After", there are fairy tales

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"God is a comedian, playing to an audience too afraid to laugh."
Voltaire

i share your observation tony. I am more poetic when i am in a poignant mood. Maybe because in one's attempt to want to free himself of the sadness the soonest time he could, he writes his emotions down and this helps release the distress. But it would not hurt to try jotting down our joys next time.

(: you got the point fullmom. and welcome (:

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"God is a comedian, playing to an audience too afraid to laugh."
Voltaire

Thanks too for the welcome tony

(:

and, God, won't anyone call me Tonyukuk ever?

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"God is a comedian, playing to an audience too afraid to laugh."
Voltaire

You are to me from now on Tonyukuk

at last, some respecting others' nicknames arrived(: the QP fluffland will never be the same again (:

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"God is a comedian, playing to an audience too afraid to laugh."
Voltaire

Sorry, not in my nature. However I don't need to be unkind here. Perhaps a bit dark but that's you. If you lightened it up it wouldn't be really yours.

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السلام عليكم

it is good to see your scientific aspect here.

hope you are getting better?

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"God is a comedian, playing to an audience too afraid to laugh."
Voltaire