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I wrote this poem "My dear in love i rest my soul". Read and let me know your comments.
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There was beauty in everything you saw
There was music in every words you heard
There was sweetness in everything you ate
There was softness in everything you touched

But still my dear you couldn't enjoy those
Worry for me, is a fretfulness you never conquered
Separation from me, is a pain you never forgot
Love for me, is a fire you kept on for ever

I will remember you till the sword separates me
I will remember you till i fall off the gallous
I will remember you till my last breath
My dear in love i rest my soul

It's really sweet. I love it. In the line 'my dear in love I rest my soul', is there supposed to be a comma between 'my dear' and 'in love'? You should post your poem in the fluff forum in the strand titled 'original poetry/material', more people'll probably see you that way. And start your own thread in the fluff forum to say hi, so everyone can meet you! Anyway, great poem, and wecome to the Page!

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I disapprove of what you say, but I will defend to the death your right to say it. ~Voltaire

dude.
that's one heck of a awesome poem!
i LOVE it.

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Suddenly, I realized it. I was never what everyone thought of me. They didn't know. They didn't know who I really was. Did I even?
- Sapphira

Thank you Sapphira and ink_scratch for you comments.

Yes "ink_scratch", a comma will be required.

Its a beauty of your soul reflected in words ...

Greetings to the soul you decided to dedicate those special words to

Libra.