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Webbratz
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 Posted: Mon Aug 22, 2005 11:07 am |
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Poem # 1
Alone I sit and ponder,
Beside myself with grief,
Crumbling are my walls
Despairingly I watch my world collapse
Everything has gone out of reach.
Far beyond the walls of infinity,
Gathering my soul, I sit and wait,
Hounds a many, yet angels so few,
Innocent eyes watch as they dispute,
Just try not to get caught up in it all, I would hate to have to mourn you too.
Kindly I am given reprieve from the upset before my eyes,
Laughing, I suddenly wonder if this is another trick in disguise.
Merely an illusion set to deceive
Nothing dwells within me but hope
Out of the darkness a light, I see
Perhaps an illusion though,
Quill pens write swiftly on the parchment
Remembering this day as if,
Something I had missed
Trying to recapture
Useless information
Poem # 2
Alone I sit and ponder
Beside myself with grief
Crumbling are my walls
Despairingly I watch my world collapse
Everything has gone out of reach
Far beyond the walls of infinity
Gathering my soul, I sit and wait
Hounds a many, yet angels so few
It is my mind you are witnessing, that will soon explode
Jumping through the bits and cracks, I walk through infinity.
Kicking down the walls of my sanity
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FyodorDostoyevsky11
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Posted: Mon Aug 22, 2005 2:20 pm |
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Vanadic are the metals that create my mind?
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That makes no sense, I know.  
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Christopher Grant Burks
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Nahwatah Ravenheart
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Posted: Mon Aug 22, 2005 3:31 pm |
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Fyodor,
It makes sense. I looked up the many meanings of it. As long as we understand the meaning. There are no rules in poetry.
Will this poison that I battle not leave me alone
Raven
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FyodorDostoyevsky11
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Posted: Mon Aug 22, 2005 3:38 pm |
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Xenophobia is not fun to have.
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Joker?
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Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2005 3:58 pm |
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Poem two,
Living life through blind eyes, I quietly wait to die. 
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FyodorDostoyevsky11
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Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2005 4:17 pm |
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Yellow is now the color I fear
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Halliberry
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Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2005 5:55 pm |
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...Oh my...
Have you guys tried to read this forum from the beginning? It is completely confusing. It started off well, but then petered out into mass confusion. (A lot of forum hijacking as Raven puts it.) Perhaps if a new thread was started more people would be likely to participate. It's a great idea though!
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Don't walk behind me, I may not lead. Don't walk in front of me, I may not follow. Just walk beside me and be my friend. -Albert Camus
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rnassar_7
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Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2005 1:47 am |
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ya I stopped writing lines cuz I got really confused
Rana
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Nahwatah Ravenheart
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Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2005 4:50 pm |
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hmmm...i was really starting to like Poem number one. Oh well!
Raven
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FyodorDostoyevsky11
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Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2005 4:59 pm |
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I posted another Poem Game thread to sort things out... I don't know if it's the right thing to do... Anyway, I will restart. ABC order and there will be no poem number two! Only one.
As I ponder beneath a vail of darkness
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foxfire
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Posted: Fri Sep 02, 2005 6:46 pm |
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FyodorDostoyevsky11 wrote: I love Poe! I'll try to start:
Asleep and laying by the fire
Frost forming on his jacket
Hoping someone would stop by
Goddamn that blasted tire
A hanger in the road he hit
Cruising in the mountains
He hadn't passed a car for days
But he had a survival kit
He wanted to see Barbra Lee
His loved and beautiful wife
Instead of stuck out here, his teeth chattering
Involuntarily
This ballad is stupid this ballad is bad
Won't sombody tell me to stop
Raven insisted she wouldn't go first
I'm sorry, everybody, for making this crap
The blasted structure isn't in time
My reasoning was off
The last line of the stanza previous
Doesn't even rhyme
Sorry. God I suck.
wow. that was terrible. 
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Halliberry
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Posted: Fri Sep 02, 2005 8:18 pm |
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That wasn't very nice foxfire. Perhaps constructive criticism would be more beneficial.
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Don't walk behind me, I may not lead. Don't walk in front of me, I may not follow. Just walk beside me and be my friend. -Albert Camus
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FyodorDostoyevsky11
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Posted: Sat Sep 03, 2005 8:38 am |
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Nah. The smiley helped and I wasn't offended anyway. It's fine. I take insults as constructive critisism unless I know they aren't based upon anything, so surely, sice firefox hasn't met me, it would have been based upon the ballad, no?
It's all good!
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rnassar_7
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Posted: Sat Sep 03, 2005 2:01 pm |
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hey I like the poems! we just need some organization!
Rana
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Halliberry
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Posted: Sat Sep 03, 2005 4:24 pm |
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That is true Rana.
Chris, that's a good way to look at it!
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Don't walk behind me, I may not lead. Don't walk in front of me, I may not follow. Just walk beside me and be my friend. -Albert Camus
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