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 Post subject: Just some poems
PostPosted: Thu Apr 14, 2005 6:14 pm 

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Well, here are some poems I wrote. Jeez they seem so long when you type them out. Enjoy?


She opened her eyes
and blew out 9 tiny flames
on 9 pink candles.
One for good luck.
They stare at the girl with the curly hair
and no front teeth,
waiting to know what she wished for.
Of course,
that would be bad luck.
So they all sighed and moved on
to the strawberry ice cream
which was her favorite.
As they licked and laughed
over sundresses and sugar cones
she wispered to me
what she had wished for.
New ballet shoes,
a bicyle,
and that nothing could ever change
from the way it was that day.
She wished that her mom
could allways smell that good,
that band-aids solved everything,
and that her best friends never moved away.

Well, seconds marched on
and birthday wishes turned out
to not last so long.
Now if she wants
to smell her mother
she has to visit the graveyard
on the corner
of grover and 5th.
She learned that band-aids
don't solve everything,
love does,
and that bestfriends often
fall for men who
live in Chicago.
But she didn't forget her 8th birthday.
Even when her grand daughter threw a surprise
at the Sheraton hotel.
She wished that she could use
new ballet shoes
and a bicycle.
And even that she could eat
the strawberry ice cream on the table.
She counted 81 candles.
One for good luck.
Which made her tired.
And then, she closed her eyes
I wish nothing had ever changed.


My grandfather gave me a gift certificate for my birthday.
"It's to a salon" he said.
"A hundred bucks" he said.
Maybe he feels guilty
that gift certificates
are all he means to me.

I told the hairdresser to dye my hair blonde
and cut it the way
the other girls did.
And then,
I used a tanning booth
and waxed my eyebrows
and the women with purple fingernails
showed me how to apply make-up.
She wore too much herself
but her hair smelt like raspberries.
I wonder if she was married.
To christen my new look
my mother bought me
a skirt with butterflies
from an expensive store
which made me feel uncomfortable.
The boy who handed me my receipt

When I went to school
they smiled, giggled, awed, and stared.
An upperclassman held the door
and another said
New behavior.
And all of the teacher and girls
told me that I
was beautiful.

I should be

But I thought that I
was beautiful
before my evolution.
And I'd like to know:
Was I the only one?

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 15, 2005 5:35 pm 

Joined: Mon Sep 13, 2004 2:01 pm
Posts: 37
Location: Massachusetts, USA
These are great. :) I really liked the first one. :D

Beauty is in the eye of the beholder and it may be necessary from time to time to give a stupid or misinformed beholder a black eye.
-Miss Piggy

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 19, 2005 7:21 pm 

Joined: Tue Apr 05, 2005 3:53 pm
Posts: 10
Location: Tennessee
Yeah, I'd have to agree! The first one was amazing. simple feelings so delicately defined and refined and made to match human emotion. It seems everyone feels this way at one point in their life. The second was cool too, I liked the way you put it into a semi-first person stance. Clever :)

"May truth be my sword, courage, my shield, and may love guide them both."
Motto of the Britannian Royal Guarde
~Govannon Mac Lyr of Chessapeake, Ultima Online

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 20, 2005 1:23 pm 

Joined: Thu Feb 17, 2005 1:01 pm
Posts: 125
Location: ANU
Absolutely loved the first one.

He who would have the fruit must climb the tree

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PostPosted: Thu Apr 21, 2005 4:18 am 

Joined: Mon Mar 21, 2005 2:10 pm
Posts: 355
I'm hesitant about reading poetry normally.

I liked both of them - a lot - and I think you're more than half magic.

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PostPosted: Sun Jun 12, 2005 12:26 pm 
Pink Princess
Pink Princess

Joined: Sat May 28, 2005 6:46 pm
Posts: 519
The first poem was really interesting. Is that how life really turns out? I hope not. I hope it all stays the way I want it to. I like how it is now. I don't want it to change. Not if it's going to be a bad change. If it changed for the better then I guess that would be fine.
That second poem. "My Evolution." Is that what happened to you? Are you speaking from experience as that person or experience watching that person change?

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