Hey Pote!
I'm new too but even so I know how to reconize good writing when I read it and that was exellent.
I find it a bit sad though

... I mean, it maybe because I idealist and I like to think that everyone in the world has a good side and not everyone is materialistic (although Fate seems to want to prouve me otherwise...) you know I'd like to think there's a chance for humanity you know...
But, that's besides the point right... happens happens right? And it's just a poem no matter how touching it is...