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 Post subject: Life mistakes
PostPosted: Fri Feb 26, 2010 8:06 pm 
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When Everybody blames you.
Take a breath and count to ten.
mistakes are linked to knowledge.

It's like chess or a battle.
when you make the wrong move.
you can't go back as we can't travel to the past.

You must study the wrongs of today.
to make them the rights of tomorrows battle.
People will always try to blame you.

dont matter if you did it or not.
but no fight could be lost when you don't fight at all.
Keep your mind and save all the devils which the heart creates.
for their responsible of all your mistakes.

Life is a problem.
one that could only be solved with knowledge.
it is neither solved by anger or revenge.
or satisfied with money and luxury.
It is only solved when the purpose of your being is fulfil.
and there are no more storm's covering your eyes.
or lies blinding your mind or darknest in your heart.

Life is only solved when you could answer
" who you really are ? "
without including no lies.

this is one of my poems , just want some feedback if that's not to much to ask.


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PostPosted: Sat Feb 27, 2010 4:21 pm 
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Hello letrazzz, welcome to the forum. Thank you for sharing your poem with us. I really like your thoughts and the way you have expressed them.

Maybe your last line could read "without including any lies" to make it clearer what you mean?

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PostPosted: Sun Feb 28, 2010 11:59 am 
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oh thank you for the suggestion , I might actually change it to that.


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a nice poem from here. Love it


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 Post subject: Interesting Poem
PostPosted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 2:00 am 
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Hey I read this poem..It is good one and shared it on facebook.

Thanks


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